Comments on: Page 15: Lost In Memory by Matt Kluchar

By: Matt Kluchar

Matt Kluchar — Mon, 24 Aug 2009 02:04:24 +0000

I guess it’s ok for me to interject something, since I wrote the story. Just a comment about Gabe. I wanted him to be a little ambiguous. I am a Christian and originally wanted him to be an angel. But I wanted him to be more accesible to non-Christians as well, just like a mysterious spectral-type character. I had written where he told Peter he was an angel and then I took it out and left it up to the reader’s interpretation.

By: Liz Mierzejewski

Liz Mierzejewski — Wed, 19 Aug 2009 00:46:35 +0000

I loooove When Harry Met Sally.

By: Big Anklevich

Big Anklevich — Tue, 18 Aug 2009 18:19:33 +0000

I suppose you can have a cookie…but just one.

I haven’t heard of Geekspeak myself, but, searching the net, I found the podcast and I’m listening to it now. It’s a fun show. I like their news stories that they find. Interesting things. I guess I’m a geek, and they speak to me.

By: Abbie

Abbie — Tue, 18 Aug 2009 06:18:48 +0000

>That’s just like you, Abbie. You go and say these things, and you make it >impossible for me to hate you. And I do hate you, Abbie.

And also, you’re so warm and cuddly. Hey, I got another drabble (as yet unproduced) on the Drabblecast! Norm read it live on a Geekspeak Radio interview. (Eep!) He also mentioned you guys, and the hosts from Geekspeak said they’d heard of you, so cookies for everyone?

By: Rish Outfield

Rish Outfield — Tue, 18 Aug 2009 04:30:47 +0000

Dang, more high praise, just when I was going to give you a pink slip.

That’s just like you, Abbie. You go and say these things, and you make it impossible for me to hate you. And I do hate you, Abbie.

By: Abbie

Abbie — Mon, 17 Aug 2009 23:58:39 +0000

Yes…. I didn’t actually miss the angel name, either. I just didn’t see how it was necessary or had anything to do with time travel. Like Josh said, there wasn’t an “Ah-ha” moment (or, as I like to call them, a “so what?” moment).

But, you know, that’s forgivable in magical realism. Nooo one expects the Angle Gabriel!!! Whahaha!

Also, I think Rish has the most versatile voice in podcasting. I actually thought you’d gotten someone else to play the old man at the beginning.

By: Josh R.

Josh R. — Mon, 17 Aug 2009 23:36:32 +0000

Well, I understood he was supposed to be Gabriel but there was never an aha moment with Peter that I think we really needed.

Big, it’s just your old man voice. Your regular voice just sounds like a voice.

By: Big Anklevich

Big Anklevich — Mon, 17 Aug 2009 23:28:18 +0000

Well, I didn’t write the story, but I’m pretty certain Gabe is supposed to be an angel. I think that’s why he’s named Gabe, Re: The Angel Gabriel. I think that’s why Peter was never freaked out by the guy like he should have been. Gabe seemed to turn on some kind of Trust Me power, and Peter just went with it.

Josh – You’re not the first person to say I sound like a muppet. One listener once told me that my voice was very much like Jim Henson’s, so there you have it, I guess. Rish must be Frank Oz, he could do tons of different voices brilliantly. Jim Henson was basically just Kermit the Frog, or a character who sounded just like Kermit.

By: Abbie

Abbie — Mon, 17 Aug 2009 23:20:38 +0000

Yeah, I was actually going to say that I didn’t find the doctor’s explanation all that unbelievable when talking to a patient. To a colleague, yes, it would have been a silly conversation. But doctors couch things to patients in these sorts of terms all the time. It’s not strictly correct. It’s not what lab is telling the doc. But it’s something that the patient can understand.

I, too, was wondering what Gabe was supposed to be.

By: Josh R.

Josh R. — Mon, 17 Aug 2009 23:05:38 +0000

Rish’s old man voice is pretty good. Big, you kind of sounded like a muppet. Sorry. (My old man voice isn’t any better; the best I get is the sergeant I played in “Grenade” on Nobilis’s podcast.)

For me the moment the story lost me wasn’t the “missing parts” but when the main character had the same last name as the author. Self-insertion stories are, in my opinion, really difficult to pull off. Then, in the AN, when the author said “yeah, it was me and all my friends”, that soured it for me even more.

I did like the ending — not what I was expecting.

I really needed to know more about Gabe for him to work as a character. Was he some sort of angel, a ghost, something else? Otherwise he was just a deus ex machina.

Not my favorite Dunesteef episode. Sorry guys.